Question

17．閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文．
The purpose of a high school graduation ceremony is to celebrate students who have successfully met the academic and extracurricular requirements for graduation．The ceremony provides a public chance in which graduating students receive their diplomas（文憑），marking their official graduation from high school．High school graduation ceremonies are typically held at the end of the academic year and are attended by teaching staff，graduates and their families and friends．
Though the event lasts only a few hours，a great ceremony is a memory that those who attend can treasure for years and years．Rather than marking the end of one stage in a student's life，graduation signifies the beginning of the next．
Along with the awarding of the diplomas，the commencement address（畢業(yè)演說） is an essential part of the ceremony．The address traditionally congratulates graduates on their achievements，encourages them on their endeavors and imparts wisdom for the future．
【寫作內(nèi)容】
假如你作為畢業(yè)生代表，要在高中畢業(yè)典禮進行演講．請根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容寫一份演講稿．
1．以約30個詞概括這篇短文的主要內(nèi)容；
2．然后以約120個詞圍繞高中生活和畢業(yè)的話題進行講述，內(nèi)容包括：
（1）高中畢業(yè)給你的感受；
（2）舉一件難忘的高中經(jīng)歷說明你在高中三年學(xué)習(xí)生活的收獲；
（3）在畢業(yè)之際，你想感激哪個人，簡單說明理由．
【寫作要求】
1）在作文中可以使用自己親身的經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容但不得  
   直接引用原文中的句子；
    2）作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱．
【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫．

Answer 1

分析 本文是讀寫任務(wù)型寫作，這類作文可按照三段式模板寫：第一段：概況所給短文要點．第二段：過渡詞引出主題句---闡述理由．第三段：個人觀點．特別要注意第一段的概括．用自己的語言概括，不能照搬照抄原文．時態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時．人稱用第一人稱和第三人稱．重要短語：a cherishing memory （一個珍貴的記憶），mark sth （標(biāo)志著某事），symbolize sth （象征某事），be full of（充滿，裝滿），be touched by（被…感動），together with （與…一起），achieve sth（獲得某物），put on（上演），be embarrassed by（對…尷尬），cheered for（歡呼），gain sth（獲得某物），be precious（寶貴的）．

【高分句型一】
1．The high school graduation ceremony is a cherishing memory，①because it ②not only marks the graduates'public graduation from the school，but also symbolizes the beginning of their future．
①此處連詞"because"引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句，主句為"The high school graduation ceremony is a cherishing memory"．
②此處是由"not only…，but also…"連接兩個并列的謂語動詞"mark"和"symbolize"．
【高分句型二】
1．I am full of hope and expectation for the coming days，and also deeply touched by the past three years in this high school together with all the teachers and classmates．
此處是由"and"引導(dǎo)兩個并列的動作，"am full of"和"touched by"．
【高分句型三】
3．I can't help recalling some good memories about my high school life．
此處是由固定結(jié)構(gòu)"can't help doing sth"，意思為"忍不住，經(jīng)不住做某事"．

解答 The high school graduation ceremony is a cherishing memory，because it not only marks the graduates'public graduation from the school，but also symbolizes the beginning of their future．【高分句型一】Besides，the graduates receive both congratulations and encouragement．（感受）
      In this unforgettable moment，as a student representa tive speaking here，I am full of hope and expectation for the coming days，and also deeply touched by the past three years in this high school together with all the teachers and classmates．【高分句型二】（收獲）
       During the past senior school days，I have achieved a lot．I can't help recalling some good memories about my high school life．【高分句型三】Once I put on a dancing performance in the school Art Festival Show．Luckily，I missed a step and slipped．I was embarrassed but my classmates cheered for me．With their support，I continued with the rest of the dance perfectly．In the experi ence，I think the friendship and the encouragement I gained was the most precious．（感激之人及理由）

點評 讀寫任務(wù)型寫作是將閱讀與寫作有機結(jié)合，要求考生既能讀懂文章信息，又要依據(jù)要求規(guī)范連貫地表達內(nèi)容，其中準(zhǔn)確概括很有挑戰(zhàn)且十分重要．主題概括法 （段意合并法）．寫作時應(yīng)抓住主題句（關(guān)鍵句），一般為文章第一段和各段第一句，然后進行段意合并，再用1-2個漂亮的句式整理成文；分析原因時，注意分條稱述，并使用恰當(dāng)?shù)你暯釉~，但要避免落入俗套；談?wù)搯⑹緯r注意句式的變換使用，避免句式的單一．另外，要應(yīng)盡可能多地使用一些高級詞匯，為文章增色．