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2．最近，你們學(xué)校發(fā)起"閱讀名人傳記，增長人生智慧，成就理想人生"的活動，要求學(xué)生每人讀一本名人傳記．請你根據(jù)以下要求，寫一篇發(fā)言稿來介紹你所了解的名人：
1．簡單介紹該人物的主要生平和事跡；
2．你的想法和感悟，及如何去做．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)：110詞左右；
2．開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)．
Good afternoon，everyone!
The book I read is about Marie Curie，the first woman scientist who won the Nobel Prize．（高分句型一）
Marie was born in Poland but she had to go to Paris for further study，where she began her scientific work．（高分句型二）Due to her devotion and dedication to science，she made a great discovery-radium，which contributed to the development of nuclear power and medical treatment．（高分句型三）However，she asked nothing for what she had done and made sure that radium should be used to benefit the human race．（該人物的主要生平和事跡）
When reading her story，I was moved to tears several times．I admired her so much that I made up my mind to work hard and become a scientist．I think I need to improve my studies and prepare for my future career．（想法和感悟）
Thanks for listening!
Thanks for listening!

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息最近，你們學(xué)校發(fā)起"閱讀名人傳記，增長人生智慧，成就理想人生"的活動，要求學(xué)生每人讀一本名人傳記．請你根據(jù)以下要求，寫一篇發(fā)言稿來介紹你所了解的名人，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：簡單介紹該人物的主要生平和事跡；你的想法和感悟，及如何去做．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：Due to 幸虧，由于；contribute to 有助于；However然而；make up my mind to  do下定決心去做某事；prepare for為…做準備；
The book I read is about Marie Curie，the first woman scientist who won the Nobel Prize．（高分句型一）
Marie was born in Poland but she had to go to Paris for further study，where she began her scientific work．（高分句型二）
Due to her devotion and dedication to science，she made a great discovery-radium，which contributed to the development of nuclear power and medical treatment．（高分句型三）

解答 Good afternoon，everyone!
       The book I read is about Marie Curie，the first woman scientist who won the Nobel Prize．（高分句型一）
       Marie was born in Poland but she had to go to Paris for further study，where she began her scientific work．（高分句型二）Due to her devotion and dedication to science，she made a great discovery-radium，which contributed to the development of nuclear power and medical treatment．（高分句型三）However，she asked nothing for what she had done and made sure that radium should be used to benefit the human race．（該人物的主要生平和事跡）
      When reading her story，I was moved to tears several times．I admired her so much that I made up my mind to work hard and become a scientist．I think I need to improve my studies and prepare for my future career．（想法和感悟）
      Thanks for listening!

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．