Question

假設(shè)你是李華，前兒天你參加了 Cloud Travel Agency組織的長白山三日游。下面是該旅行社的廣告，請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面廣告中箭頭所指內(nèi)容對(duì)其不實(shí)之處向消費(fèi)者協(xié)會(huì)寫一封投訴信。

注意：
1.   詞數(shù)100左右;
2.   可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3.   信的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好。
Dear Sir or Madam,
I’m writing to express my complaint about the service of Cloud Travel Agency. ______________________________________________________________________________
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Regards,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Sir or Madam,
I’m writing to express my complaint about the service of Cloud Travel Agency.
A few days ago, I joined a three-day trip to Changbai Mountain with this travel agency. I found a few differences between their ads and action.
As they say, they provide a large air-conditioned bus, but we only rode in a shabby bus without any air-conditioner. Yes, they served us lunch, but the food tasted terrible, some even with sand. We didn’t enjoy any kind of shower; we only bathed in cold water. As for sightseeing, the guides led us to several expensive souvenir shops, which wasted us much time. As a result, two scenery spots were left unseen in the end.
We do hope something can be done to prevent such things happening again.
Regards,
Li Hua

試題分析：考查應(yīng)用文中的書信的寫作。根據(jù)下面廣告中箭頭所指內(nèi)容對(duì)其不實(shí)之處向消費(fèi)者協(xié)會(huì)寫一封投訴信。要點(diǎn)是以該旅行社的廣告呈現(xiàn)出來的，動(dòng)筆前要好好審題，仔細(xì)的閱讀旅行社的廣告會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)有4點(diǎn)和實(shí)際不符合，要把要點(diǎn)說明清楚，審題時(shí)注意本文使用一般過去式，描述要點(diǎn)時(shí)要運(yùn)用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用省略句，倒裝句和強(qiáng)調(diào)句型準(zhǔn)確表述。As they say, they provide a large air-conditioned bus, but we only rode in a shabby bus without any air-conditioner.和As for sightseeing, the guides led us to several expensive souvenir shops, which wasted us much time.這兩句話寫得都很好。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：考查應(yīng)用文關(guān)鍵在于審題，全面包括要點(diǎn)。同時(shí)注意謀篇布局的順序，還有運(yùn)用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時(shí)選擇高級(jí)的詞匯和語法項(xiàng)目讓文章更有文采。