Question

假如你是李華，你的美國筆友Mike想了解你校開設(shè)的新課程《通用技術(shù)》的情況，你向他作如下的介紹：
這門課旨在提高學(xué)生的實際運用能力；
通過這門課的學(xué)習(xí)，你已經(jīng)學(xué)會了修理、設(shè)計和制作一些物品；
你的感受。
注意：1、詞數(shù)不少于100；2、開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；4、通用技術(shù)--- General Technology
Dear Mike,
Thank you for your letter asking about the General Technology, a new course that
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Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mike,
Thank you for your letter asking about the General Technology, a new course that we are taking at school. Here is something about it.
The new course aims to teach us students basic technical skills and improve our designing ability. From the course, I have learned to use various types of common tools safely. I can even repair some things that are broken in my house and community. What’s more, I can design and make an item that is useful in our daily life. We also have to attend a written test for the course before graduation.
In my opinion, we will benefit from such a practical course and we will acquire more knowledge in an interesting way. We enjoy it mainly because the course is closely related to our everyday life.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達(dá)，文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，而且很具體，考生要把要點解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。但是在寫自己的感受的時候，要求考生自己發(fā)揮拓展，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。因為是書信，所以本篇作文在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，運用了好的詞組和句子： aims to目的是，In my opinion在我看來, benefit from I can even repair some things that are broken in my house and community. I can design and make an item that is useful in our daily life. 這兩句話用了定語從句， We enjoy it mainly because the course is closely related to our everyday life.這句話用了過去分詞做定語。還有范文使用了What’s more,這樣的詞使文章更加連貫。