Question

你班就“廣場舞噪音擾民”事件展開了討論。請你用英語將討論情況為報社“讀者來信”欄目編輯寫信。
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1. 廣場舞是一種很好的保持身心健康的方式。
2. 有些同學認為廣場舞音樂引起的噪音嚴重影響了人們的生活和學習，理應禁止。
3. 一些同學則認為，人們有權(quán)選擇自己喜歡的健身娛樂方式，可調(diào)低音量，限制時間。
4. 解決措施: ⑴ 學會互相理解，彼此尊重；
⑵ 政府該為市民提供足夠的活動空間等。
＊參考詞匯：廣場舞 square dancing
【寫作要求】
1. 只能用5個句子表達全部內(nèi)容。
2. 文章的開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，但不算字數(shù)。
【評分標準】
句子結(jié)構(gòu)準確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章連貫。
Dear Editor,
I’m writing to tell about the discussion we’ve had about the conflicts between square dancers and the residents nearby.
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Sincerely yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Editor,
I’m writing to tell about the discussion we’ve had about the conflicts between square dancers and the residents nearby.
We all do agree that square dancing is a good way of keeping fit, especially for the elders. Some students argue that we should forbid people from dancing in public places because the noise caused by the loud music really affects people’s normal life and study. Some insist that people have rights to enjoy their ways of body building and entertaining, and the dancers can keep the noise to an acceptable volume, and limit their dancing time. We all agree that both the dancers and the residents nearby should try to understand and respect each other. Apart from that, the government should provide more places for the citizens, such as culture squares, parks and so on. Only in this way can we solve the problem properly.
Sincerely yours,
Li Hua

試題分析：寫好提綱式作文的關(guān)鍵是認真審題和分析所給的提綱，因此考生首先要認真閱讀前面的提示，認清寫作要求和提綱之間的關(guān)系，然后確定文章的主題、文體、人稱和時態(tài)。根據(jù)所給提綱，列出要點，并以此為基礎充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當。語言力求準確、簡潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時應選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性。考生必須認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等。
【亮點說明】范文很好的表達了要點的內(nèi)容，使用了一些很好的詞組和句型：a good way of keeping fit 保持健康的好方法，Apart from除了， Some students argue that we should forbid people from dancing in public places because the noise caused by the loud music really affects people’s normal life and study. 這句話用了過去分詞做定語，Some insist that people have rights to enjoy their ways of body building and entertaining, and the dancers can keep the noise to an acceptable volume, and limit their dancing time.這句話用了虛擬語氣， Only in this way can we solve the problem properly.這句話用了倒裝句。