Question

15．閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞的英語短文．
The elephant and the fly
A disciple（信徒），who was disturbed by the fact that his mind was in constant unrest，asked his teacher，"Why are most people's minds restless？What can one do to still the mind？"The teacher looked at the disciple，smiled and told him a story：
 An elephant was standing and picking leaves from a tree．A small fly came，flying and buzzing（嗡嗡叫） near his ear．The elephant waved it away with his long ears．Then the fly came again，and the elephant waved it away once more．
This was repeated several times．Then the elephant asked the fly，"Why are you so restless and noisy？Why can't you stay for a while in one place？"
The fly answered，"I am attracted to whatever I see，hear or smell．My five senses pull me constantly in all directions and I cannot resist them．What is your secret？How can you stay so calm and still？"
The elephant stopped eating and said，"My five senses do not rule my attention．Whatever I do，I get immersed in it．Now that I am eating，I am completely absorbed in eating．In this way I can enjoy my food and chew it better．I rule and control my attention，and not the other way around．"
Upon hearing these words，a smile appeared on the disciple's face，"I understand!If my five senses are in control of my mind and attention，then my mind is in constant unrest．If I am in charge of my five senses and attention，then my mind becomes calm．"
【寫作內容】
1．以約30個詞概括短文的內容；
2．然后以約120個詞就"專注"這一主題發(fā)表你的看法，并包括以下要點：
（1）大象和蒼蠅的故事給你的啟示；
（2）講述你（或你朋友）因為太多干擾而受到影響的經歷；
（3）你認為怎樣才能保持專注、專心．
【寫作要求】
1．在作文中可以使用自己親身的經歷或者虛構的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2．作文中不得出現(xiàn)真實的姓名和學校名稱．
【評分標準】
  概括準確，語言規(guī)范，內容合適，篇章連貫．

Answer 1

分析 本文是讀寫任務型寫作，這類作文可按照三段式模板寫：第一段：概況所給短文要點．第二段：過渡詞引出主題句---闡述理由．第三段：個人觀點．特別要注意第一段的概括．用自己的語言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 時態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱用第一和第三人稱． 重要短語：be absorbed in （全身心地投入于事），stay still（保持安靜），obtain calmness（獲得冷靜），be inspired by（被激勵、激發(fā)），the ability to do sth（做某事的能力），focus one's attention on…（集中注意力在…），the key to （…的關鍵），be distracted by sth （被某事分散注意力），achieve success（獲得成功），remind sb of…（提醒某人某事），after-class activities（課外活動），be intended for（目的在于），be eager to do sth（渴望做某事），settle down（安頓下來），keep sth up（保持某事），be interfered by（被…干擾），in the end（最后）．
【高分句型一】
1．the disciple realized that only by controlling his senses can he obtain calmness．
此處是賓語從句中使用了部分倒裝結構，具體結構為"Only+【狀語成分：介詞短語/when、if引導的從句/時間副詞】+一般疑問句形式"．
【高分句型二】
1．a person①who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired，②unable to achieve his success．
①此處是由關系代詞"who"引導的定語從句，先行詞為"a person"，關系代詞"who"在從句中作主語．
     ②此處是形容詞短語作狀語，主句為"a person who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired"．
【高分句型三】
2．I have learned a lesson from this experience that one should focus on one thing at a time before he can get it well done．
此處是由連接詞"that"引導的同位語從句，解釋說明名詞"this experience"的具體內容．
【高分句型四】
3．Only when we have a clear and determined mind can we accomplish something in the end．
此處是部分倒裝結構，具體結構為"Only+【狀語成分：介詞短語/when、if引導的從句/時間副詞】+一般疑問句形式"．

解答 An elephant told a restless fly that being absorbed in doing things helped him stay still．After hearing the story from his teacher，the disciple realized that only by controlling his senses can he obtain calmness．【高分句型一】（概括）
After reading the story，I was inspired by what the elephant said．The ability to focus your attention is the key to your success in doing anything．Just like the fly，a person who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired，unable to achieve his success．【高分句型二】（啟示）
This reminds me of what happened when I entered high school as a Senior One student．I was so excited to find that there were various student organizations and after-class activities intended for us students．It seemed that many groups were suitable to me．During the first term，I was attracted whenever there was a notice from a student group and I was eager to find out more about it．As a result，I didn't spend enough time on my studies，nor could I settle down on my homework every day．Consequently，I failed in an important exam．（經歷）
I have learned a lesson from this experience that one should focus on one thing at a time before he can get it well done．【高分句型三】To do so，we should put what we are doing in the first place and keep it up without being interfered by other events．Only when we have a clear and determined mind can we accomplish something in the end．【高分句型四】（個人觀點：怎樣才能保持專注、專心）

點評 讀寫任務型寫作是將閱讀與寫作有機結合，要求考生既能讀懂文章信息，又要依據要求規(guī)范連貫地表達內容，其中準確概括很有挑戰(zhàn)且十分重要，根據記敘文、議論文、說明文等不同文體作相應概括，總的來說，遵循以下步驟：確定主題句；尋找關鍵詞；重構主題句；重組支持句．寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．