Question

假如你叫李華，你的同學王明總是說因為學習忙而沒有時間鍛煉，最近天氣變化快，他生病了，請你根據(jù)下列要點給他寫封建議信：
1．冬去春來，萬物復蘇，細菌也繁殖旺盛，抵抗力差的人容易生病。
2．鍛煉能增強體質(zhì)，并能使頭腦清醒；鍛煉一兩個小時，學習效果會更好；
有了強健的體格，學習時就不容易感到疲勞，也不易被疾病侵襲；
3．鍛煉跟學習同樣重要，要堅持每天鍛煉一小時。
注意：（1）短文須包括上述要點，應適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
（2）詞數(shù)：100左右。短文開頭已給出（不計詞數(shù)）。
Dear Wang Ming,
I am sorry to hear that you have been ill for days and hope you are better now.
Best wishes !
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Wang Ming,
I am sorry to hear that you have been ill for days and hope you are better now.
As is known to us all, spring is the best season of growing. It is such a refreshing time that we are filled with the hope and promise. Yet it is also the best time for the bacterium, so we should take care and exercise more especially when we are busy and hard-working, which means more outdoor activities. You are always saying that you have studied so hard that you had no time for exercise. This is harmful to your health. I feel it would be more beneficial to your health if you could take more exercise in future.
Exercise can improve your physical health and refresh your mind. After one or two hours of exercise you can study better. Only when you have a strong body can you keep on studying without feeling tired. Otherwise your study will be interrupted from time to time by sickness.
Exercise is as useful and important as your study. I hope you can take at least one hour’s exercise every day after you are recovered .
Best wishes !
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

解析試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。要求根據(jù)要點寫封建議信，做題前一定要認真分析要點，理解要點要表達的含義。這篇作文的要點是以提綱列出的，而且很詳細，考生要做的是將要點全面的合理的解釋清楚，應該注意適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當選用表示因果、遞進、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調(diào)感。多使用高級詞匯和重點句型。
【亮點說明】范文使用了一些高級的短語和各種多變的句式：be filled with 充滿了，be harmful to對…有害， from time to time 時而，As is known to us all, spring is the best season of growing. 這句話使用了as引導的非限制性定語從句，It is such a refreshing time that we are filled with the hope and promise. 這句話使用了it做形式主語，Yet it is also the best time for the bacterium, so we should take care and exercise more especially when we are busy and hard-working, which means more outdoor activities.這句話使用了when引導的時間狀語從句，which引導的非限制性定語從句， You are always saying that you have studied so hard that you had no time for exercise. 這句話使用了賓語從句和so…that…句型， I feel it would be more beneficial to your health if you could take more exercise in future.這句話使用了if引導的狀語從句， Only when you have a strong body can you keep on studying without feeling tired. 這句話使用了倒裝句。
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