Question

假如你是李華，最近你在瀏覽一個(gè)新西蘭中學(xué)網(wǎng)站時(shí)，看到一位名叫Tom的中學(xué)生的留言，他計(jì)劃在暑假期間到中國(guó)的北京旅游，希望能有一名中國(guó)學(xué)生作他的導(dǎo)游。你對(duì)此很感興趣，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)提示寫(xiě)一封e-mail給他。
主要內(nèi)容包括：
1．希望作他的導(dǎo)游；
2．打算如何給他作導(dǎo)游:
（1）帶他參觀故宮(the Forbidden City),鳥(niǎo)巢（the Bird’s Nest）, 水立方（the Water Cube）和長(zhǎng)城（the Great Wall）。
（2）給他講北京的悠久歷史。
（3）享受當(dāng)?shù)孛朗场?br />3．期盼他的回復(fù)。
注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右。2. 可適當(dāng)增加情節(jié)，使行文連貫。3. 信的開(kāi)頭已為你寫(xiě)好。
Dear Tom,
Recently, while visiting a senior high school website of New Zealand, I saw the message you posted on it. _______________________________________________________________________
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Best wishes.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version：
Dear Tom,
Recently, while visiting a senior high school website of New Zealand, I saw the message you posted on it.. I know that you plan to travel in Beijing during the summer vacation and you hope to have a Chinese student as your guide.
To make your journey interesting and meaningful, I’m willing to act as your guide. For one thing, I will show you around several great places of interest in Beijing, such as the Forbidden City(or the Palace Museum), the Bird’s Nest, the Water Cube and the Great Wall. For another, in order to help you learn more about Chinese culture, I am going to tell you the long history of Beijing. Besides, we’ll enjoy some local foods together. With my help, I’m sure you will have a very perfect holiday here.
I am looking forward to your early reply. I’d appreciate it if you give me this honor.
Yours sincerely, 
Li Hua

試題分析：本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是一篇實(shí)用文，要求寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，給出的要點(diǎn)較多，只要稍加發(fā)揮想象即可。寫(xiě)作時(shí)需注意以下方面：1）在信的開(kāi)頭一般要說(shuō)明寫(xiě)電子郵件的目的，本文的寫(xiě)作目的是“希望作他的導(dǎo)游”。2）在寫(xiě)第二部分，即正文時(shí)要注意三個(gè)要點(diǎn)的表述要詳略得當(dāng)，應(yīng)該用適當(dāng)?shù)倪^(guò)渡詞來(lái)起到承接作用，以使內(nèi)容連貫，具有層次感。3）盡量使用多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)來(lái)豐富文章語(yǔ)言，比如并列句、復(fù)合句和短語(yǔ)等，做到長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合。4）因?yàn)槭侵v述自己的計(jì)劃打算，所以要使用一般將來(lái)時(shí)。5）要注意字?jǐn)?shù)和標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)等。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文在結(jié)構(gòu)上采用了經(jīng)典的三段式，符合電子郵件的寫(xiě)作模式。在結(jié)構(gòu)層次上作者使用了連接詞for one thing ，for another 和besides 等使得段落層次清晰，結(jié)構(gòu)分明。在語(yǔ)言方面，作者使用了不定式短語(yǔ)in order to help you learn more about Chinese culture, 介詞短語(yǔ)With my help,以及并列句I know that you plan to travel….. and you hope…..as your guide，狀語(yǔ)從句while visiting a senior high school website of New Zealand, 賓語(yǔ)從句I’m sure you will have a very perfect holiday here.等多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)，不僅使豐富了文章語(yǔ)言的表達(dá)方式，也使文章語(yǔ)言抑揚(yáng)頓挫，朗朗上口。此外I’d appreciate it if you give me this honor.這一經(jīng)典句子的使用也使文章語(yǔ)言更加委婉禮貌，增加了文章的亮點(diǎn)。