Question

17．閱讀下面短文，按要求用英語寫一篇150詞左右的短文．
Florence Chadwick was born in California in 1918．She grew up on the beach and began competing as a swimmer at the age of six，when her uncle entered her in a race．For the next 19years，she continued as a competitive swimmer．
On July 4，1952，at the age of 34，Chadwick attempted to become the first woman to swim 21miles across the Catalina Channel，from a port on the California coast．That day the ocean was ice cold，the fog was so thick that she could hardly see the support boats that followed her，and sharks swam around her．Several times，her support crew used guns to drive away the sharks．While Americans watched on televisions，her mother and her trainer，who were in one of the support boats，encouraged her to keep going．However，after 15hours and 55minutes，with only a half mile to go，she felt that she couldn't go on，and begged to be taken out of the water．
Later，Chadwick told a reporter，"Look，I'm not excusing myself，but if I had seen land I know，I could have made it．"The fog had made her unable to see her swimming goal，and it made her feel she was getting nowhere．Two months later，she tried again．Although the fog was still heavy，yet this time she made it with the goal rooted in her mind．She knew behind the fog was the land she pursued．
【寫作內容】
1．以約30個詞概括短文大意；
2．以約120個詞就"Goal and Success"的主題談談你的看法，內容包括：
1）分析Chadwick第一次失敗和第二次成功的原因；
2）Chadwick的故事對你有什么啟發(fā)；
3）結合實際談談如何實現(xiàn)自己的目標．
【寫作要求】
1．可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱．
Goal and Success
An American woman swimmer Chadwick succeeded in crossing the Catalina Channel after failing in her first attempt．It was a goal in her mind that enabled her to make it．（高分句型一）（30詞）
Chadwick failed in her first attempt because she couldn't see the"land"（goal） due to the"fog"（difficulty）．But later，she succeeded because she had"the goal rooted in her mind"despite the heavy"fog"．
From the story，we know we should understand the relation between the goal and the difficulty．The goal can encourage us to work hard to achieve success while the difficulty may prevent us from reaching our goal．（高分句型二）However，we can achieve our goal by overcoming any possible difficulties．
As students，we may meet with many difficulties in our study，but we can surely overcome them if we have a clear goal．（高分句型三）I wish all of us could break through the"fog"to reach the beautiful"land"．（121詞）．

Answer 1

分析 根據要求可知：整篇文章分為兩部分：
第一部分：概括短文大意，一位美國女游泳者在她第一次嘗試失敗后成功地穿越了卡塔利娜海峽．
第二部分：
（1）分析Chadwick第一次失敗和第二次成功的原因；失敗是因為客觀條件如天氣寒冷、霧太厚，以及有鯊魚等等．成功是因為她對自己樹立了目標．
（2）Chadwick的故事對你有什么啟發(fā)：我們應該處理好目標和困難之間的關系．
（3）結合實際談談如何實現(xiàn)自己的目標：遇到困難時必須要有明確的目標．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：succeed in doing成功的做成某事；due to由于；despite盡管；prevent  from 阻止；However然而；
It was a goal in her mind that enabled her to make it．（高分句型一）
The goal can encourage us to work hard to achieve success while the difficulty may prevent us from reaching our goal．（高分句型二）
As students，we may meet with many difficulties in our study，but we can surely overcome them if we have a clear goal．（高分句型三）

解答 Goal and Success
        An American woman swimmer Chadwick succeeded in crossing the Catalina Channel after failing in her first attempt．It was a goal in her mind that enabled her to make it．（高分句型一）（30詞）
        Chadwick failed in her first attempt because she couldn't see the"land"（goal） due to the"fog"（difficulty）．But later，she succeeded because she had"the goal rooted in her mind"despite the heavy"fog"．
        From the story，we know we should understand the relation between the goal and the difficulty．The goal can encourage us to work hard to achieve success while the difficulty may prevent us from reaching our goal．（高分句型二）However，we can achieve our goal by overcoming any possible difficulties．
        As students，we may meet with many difficulties in our study，but we can surely overcome them if we have a clear goal．（高分句型三）I wish all of us could break through the"fog"to reach the beautiful"land"．（121詞）

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．