Question

8．假設(shè)你是李津，日前參加了在加拿大舉行的為期四周的國際中學(xué)生生存訓(xùn)練營活動，并將作為中國學(xué)生代表在閉幕式上發(fā)言．請你用英語寫一篇發(fā)言稿，要點如下：
（1）遇到的挑戰(zhàn)（語言、交往、文化差異）；
（2）你的收獲（日常生活上與學(xué)習(xí)上）
（3）感謝組織者
注意：
（1）詞數(shù)不少于120；
（2）請適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，使內(nèi)容充實、行文連貫．
（3）開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)．
Dear friends，
I am honored to deliver a closing speech on behalf of all the Chinese students in the camp．
As we know，the camp is made up of thirty students from several countries．（高分句型一） Before I came to Canada，I had made careful preparations for this camp．However，I still experienced some unexpected challenges，such as the difficulty in making my self-understood，talking with strangers and dealing with culture shock．（高分句型二） With great patience and kindness，the organizers helped me out．The four weeks in the camp has changed me greatly．Not only did I improve my oral English，but I also made lifelong friendships．Most importantly，I became more confident．So now I would like to express my great thanks to all the people who contributed to the camp．（高分句型三）
That's all．Thank you for listening．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息日前參加了在加拿大舉行的為期四周的國際中學(xué)生生存訓(xùn)練營活動，并將作為中國學(xué)生代表在閉幕式上發(fā)言．請你用英語寫一篇發(fā)言稿，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：（1）遇到的挑戰(zhàn)（語言、交往、文化差異）；（2）你的收獲（日常生活上與學(xué)習(xí)上）（3）感謝組織者 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：on behalf of代表；As we know眾所周知；However然而；deal with應(yīng)對；help  out幫助某人度過難關(guān)；Not only，but also 不僅，而且；contribute to 致力于；
As we know，the camp is made up of thirty students from several countries．（高分句型一）
However，I still experienced some unexpected challenges，such as the difficulty in making my self-understood，talking with strangers and dealing with culture shock．（高分句型二）
So now I would like to express my great thanks to all the people who contributed to the camp．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear friends，
        I am honoured to deliver a closing speech on behalf of all the Chinese students in the camp．As we know，the camp is made up of thirty students from several countries．（高分句型一） Before I came to Canada，I had made careful preparations for this camp．However，I still experienced some unexpected challenges，such as the difficulty in making my self-understood，talking with strangers and dealing with culture shock．（高分句型二） With great patience and kindness，the organizers helped me out．The four weeks in the camp has changed me greatly．Not only did I improve my oral English，but I also made lifelong friendships．Most importantly，I became more confident．So now I would like to express my great thanks to all the people
who contributed to the camp．（高分句型三）
        That's all．Thank you for listening．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．