Question

上星期五晚上，你的鄰居李娜在救人時(shí)被車撞到，導(dǎo)致右腿骨折，但事后她并不后悔。請(qǐng)你就以上事件用英語寫一篇100-120詞的短文，內(nèi)容包括：
1. 李娜的事跡；
2. 你對(duì)見義勇為的看法
參考詞匯：fracture (使。。。骨折）,heroic acts
Driving home last Friday evening, my neighbor Li Na saw a young woman lying in the middle of the road with her head and body full of blood, obviously knocked down by a passing car.

Answer 1

Driving home last Friday evening, my neighbor Li Na saw a young woman lying in the middle of the road with her head and body full of blood, obviously knocked down by a passing car.
She looked around, noticing there was no one helping the unconscious woman.  Without a second thought, she walked towards the woman.Just as she was busy with the woman, a car came to her at fast speed. She pushed away the woman just in time but had no time to run for herself. Unfortunately, she was knocked down by the car and had her leg fractured. The car driver took her and the woman immediately to the hospital.After the accident, I went to the hospital to visit her. I asked her how she felt and she said she didn't regret what she did.
Li Na's heroic acts eventually saved the woman. It occours to me that there are still lots of good people around the world. We are expected to learn from them by helping others in need . Only in this way can we make our world a better place to live in.

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達(dá)，題目給出了話題和要點(diǎn)，有兩個(gè)要點(diǎn)，但是不是很具體，考生要根據(jù)要點(diǎn)進(jìn)行拓展發(fā)揮，不能有遺漏，內(nèi)容一定要充實(shí)，這就要求增加了難度。在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時(shí)不要啰嗦，力求簡(jiǎn)潔。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】所給范文語言簡(jiǎn)潔，運(yùn)用了一些詞組和好的句子：Be busy with忙于， at fast speed快速，in time及時(shí)， knocked down 撞倒，had her leg fractured腿骨折. in need有需要， She looked around, noticing there was no one helping the unconscious woman. I asked her how she felt and she said she didn't regret what she did.這句話用了賓語從句， It occours to me that there are still lots of good people around the world. 這句話用了固定句型， Only in this way can we make our world a better place to live in.這句話用了倒裝句。