Question

5．學(xué)校英語(yǔ)報(bào)正在醞釀改版，擬從現(xiàn)有的三個(gè)欄目（健康、娛樂(lè)、文化）中去除一個(gè)，并從三個(gè)備選欄目（時(shí)尚、職業(yè)規(guī)劃、讀者反饋）中挑選一個(gè)納入該報(bào)．假設(shè)你是該校學(xué)生程飛，給校報(bào)編輯寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，表達(dá)你的觀點(diǎn)．郵件須包括以下內(nèi)容：
1．你建議去除的欄目及去除的理由；
2．你建議增加的欄目及增加的理由．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，給校報(bào)編輯寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，就學(xué)校英語(yǔ)報(bào)改版，擬從現(xiàn)有的三個(gè)欄目（健康、娛樂(lè)、文化）中去除一個(gè)，并從三個(gè)備選欄目（時(shí)尚、職業(yè)規(guī)劃、讀者反饋）中挑選一個(gè)納入該報(bào)事宜發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)．
寫(xiě)作時(shí)人稱以第一和第三人稱為主，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主．
寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：1．表示對(duì)客人的歡迎；2．介紹此項(xiàng)活動(dòng)（如活動(dòng)目的、內(nèi)容等）3．表達(dá)對(duì)客人的祝愿；
重要短語(yǔ)：reform sth（代表），be replaced by（被代替），share sth with sb（與某人分享某物），needless to say （更不用說(shuō)），according to （根據(jù)），have positive effects on（對(duì)…有影響），be of great significance（非常有意義），loss of （損失），keep fit（保持健康），contributes to（促成），broaden one's horizons（拓寬某人的視野），in turn （反過(guò)來(lái)又），be beneficial to （對(duì)…有益）．
【高分句型一】
1．①Compared to the entertainment，I hold the view ②that the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important．
①此處是過(guò)去分詞作狀語(yǔ)，主句為"I hold the view that the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important"，主句的主語(yǔ)為"I"與所給動(dòng)詞存在邏輯上的被動(dòng)關(guān)系．
②此處是由連接詞"that"引導(dǎo)的同位語(yǔ)從句，"that"引導(dǎo)的同位語(yǔ)從句解釋說(shuō)明"view"的具體內(nèi)容．
【高分句型二】
2．The main factor is that it is of great significance to keep healthy while loss of health means kissing goodbye to life．
此處是由連接詞"that"引導(dǎo)的表語(yǔ)從句，主語(yǔ)為"The main factor"，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞為"is"．
【高分句型三】
3．the progress in acquiring cultures contributes to broadening one's horizons，which in turn is beneficial to one's study and the establishment of philosophy of life．
此處是由關(guān)系代詞"which"引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，"which"在從句中作主語(yǔ)，指代前面整個(gè)主句的內(nèi)容．
【高分句型四】
4．Here I am in the hope that my advice will add a brilliant touch to the improved version of our school English Post．
此處是由連接詞"that"引導(dǎo)的同位語(yǔ)從句，連接詞"that"解釋說(shuō)明名詞"hope"的具體內(nèi)容．

解答 Dear Editor，
I've learned that our English Post is being reformed and one of the three columns is to be replaced by a new one．I'm writing this e-mail to share with you my opinions．Needless to say，the columns will definitely be designed according to students'interest and have positive effects on their study and life．（寫(xiě)信的目的）
Compared to the entertainment，I hold the view that the value of the columns concerning health and culture is more important．【高分句型一】The main factor is that it is of great significance to keep healthy while loss of health means kissing goodbye to life．【高分句型二】Consequently，more knowledge of how to keep fit can improve the quality of life．In addition，the progress in acquiring cultures contributes to broadening one's horizons，which in turn is beneficial to one's study and the establishment of philosophy of life．【高分句型三】（建議去除的欄目及去除的理由）
Furthermore，the career planning should be taken into account in the school English Post．On the one hand，it covers one's career development a great deal．On the other hand，it makes a great difference to one's career success in the future．（建議增加的欄目及去除的理由）
What has been mentioned above is my personal ideas．Here I am in the hope that my advice will add a brilliant touch to the improved version of our school English Post．【高分句型四】（希望）
Yours sincerely，
Cheng Fei

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱作文在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需注意積累短語(yǔ)和重要句型．