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7．假設(shè)你叫李華，是一家英文雜志社的心理咨詢師．某中學(xué)生小王給你寫信，提到自己偏胖，想節(jié)食減肥，征求你的意見．請你給她回一封信，談?wù)勀銓υ搯栴}的見解．內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：
1．健康比漂亮更重要；
2．學(xué)生以學(xué)習(xí)為主，不要過于注重外貌和別人的看法；
3．可通過多鍛煉身體保持健康，要改變不良的飲食習(xí)慣；
4．健康的心態(tài)也很重要．
注意：1．短文必須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；
2．詞數(shù)：120左右．    3．參考詞匯：state of mind 心態(tài)
Dear Xiao Wang，
I have received and read your letter，in which you mentioned that you wanted to lose weight by dieting．
                                              
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇書信，文章開頭結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，只需要表達(dá)清楚要點(diǎn)．寫作時(shí)首先要注意文章的段落結(jié)構(gòu)，因?yàn)檫@是回信，所以第一段應(yīng)該交代上封信的內(nèi)容，要解答的問題．第二段主要是給出筆者的建議．第三段總結(jié)．其中第二段是重點(diǎn)．
亮點(diǎn)說明：范文在表達(dá)要點(diǎn)時(shí)避免了逐字逐句翻譯，避免了漢語式的表達(dá)，用了地道的英語句型，還使用了一些常用短語，符合英語習(xí)慣．如：I have received and read your letter，in which you mentioned that you wanted to lose weight by dieting．這是非限制性定語從句的用法．還有It is only natural that young girls at your age hope to look beautiful．/it is a good idea to do it by getting more exercise and changing unhealthy eating habits，it作形式主語也是英語中常用的句型．studying is the first thing to consider while appearance is the second．這句話中，while的用法也很巧妙．另外名詞性從句也是英語寫作中常用的，如：The most important thing is that you keep a healthy state of mind．我們在寫作中要熟練的運(yùn)用這些常用句型，而且要經(jīng)常嘗試不同的表達(dá)法，不能千篇一律，才能寫出好的文章．

解答 Dear Xiao Wang，
     I have received and read your letter，in which you mentioned that you wanted to lose weight by dieting．
     It is only natural that young girls at your age hope to look beautiful．（高分句型）However，in my opinion，health is more important than beauty．For a student，studying is the first thing to consider while appearance is the second．（高分句型）So do not let others'opinions affect your normal life．However，if you do want to lose weight，it is a good idea to do it by getting more exercise and changing unhealthy eating habits．（高分句型）The most important thing is that you keep a healthy state of mind，as it will help with your studies，and will also help you overcome difficulties in dieting．（高分句型）
                                                                                                                                                                                                                          Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                           Li Hua．

點(diǎn)評 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．