Question

4．以下是三座城市在就業(yè)、娛樂(lè)、環(huán)境方面的滿意度．假如你的家庭打算移居到其中的某座城市，請(qǐng)從你和家庭的情況考慮選擇一座比較滿意的城市，并簡(jiǎn)要談?wù)勥x擇這座城市的理由．
提示：不必對(duì)圖表中的數(shù)據(jù)做詳細(xì)描寫． 

Answer 1

分析 本文是圖表作文，根據(jù)文章圖表和所給提示信息寫一篇短文，闡述你的家庭打算移居到其中的某座城市，考慮在就業(yè)、娛樂(lè)、環(huán)境等方面選擇一座比較滿意的城市并說(shuō)明理由．
寫作要點(diǎn)：1．概述圖表；2．選擇城市B的理由；3．結(jié)尾點(diǎn)題．
寫作時(shí)時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主．人稱以第一和第三人稱為主．
重要短語(yǔ)：illustrate sth （解釋某事），as follows（如下），according to（根據(jù)），in one's opinion（某人認(rèn)為），plays a vital role in（起重要作用），affect sth （影響某物），as well （也），do some recreational activities （進(jìn)行一些娛樂(lè)活動(dòng)），such as （例如），in terms of（就…而言），meet our needs（同時(shí)），all in all（問(wèn)題的答案），take sth into account（許諾某人某事），embrace the life（許諾某人某事）．
【高分句型一】
1．①what's important to my family is②that we can live in a city with a pleasant environment ③which not only plays a vital role in our physical fitness，but greatly affects our mental health as well．
①此處是由連接代詞"what"引導(dǎo)的主語(yǔ)從句，"what"在主語(yǔ)從句中作主語(yǔ)．
②此處是由連接詞"that"引導(dǎo)的表語(yǔ)從句，"that"在從句中起連接詞的作用，無(wú)意義．
③此處是由關(guān)系代詞"which"引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，"which"在定語(yǔ)從句中作主語(yǔ)，先行詞為"environmen"，定語(yǔ)從句中由"not only…，but also…"結(jié)構(gòu)連接兩個(gè)謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞．
【高分句型二】
2．What's more，we can see that the employment in City B is not so bad from the chat，which is better than City C．
此處是由關(guān)系代詞"which"引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，關(guān)系代詞"which"在從句中作主語(yǔ)，指代前面整個(gè)主句的內(nèi)容．

解答 This bar chart illustrates the satisfaction of employment、entertainment and environment in three cities．Among all the cities involved，according to the situation of my family，plan to move to City B．I have some reasons as follows．（概述圖表）
Firstly，City B has the second best environment of all the three cities．In my opinion，what's important to my family is that we can live in a city with a pleasant environment which not only plays a vital role in our physical fitness，but greatly affects our mental health as well．【高分句型一】（選擇城市B的理由一）
Secondly，there are three young members including me in my family，and we always do some recreational activities together，such as going shopping and doing some sports．In terms of entertainment，City B can meet our needs more than the other cities．（選擇城市B的理由二）
What's more，we can see that the employment in City B is not so bad from the chat，which is better than City C．【高分句型二】My parents are both senior engineers and I have no worries about them．For me，I'm just a high school student，employment is not my priority．I know if I study hard form now on，I can find a good job without any doubt in the near future．（選擇城市B的理由三）
All in all，after taking what my family need into account．City B is my first choice．I look forward to embracing the life of the new city．（結(jié)尾點(diǎn)題）

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