Question

有這樣一則故事：在唐太宗貞觀(guān)年間，在一個(gè)磨坊里，有一匹馬和一頭驢成了好朋友，馬在外面拉貸，驢在磨坊里拉磨。有一天，唐僧要到天竺取經(jīng)，選中了這匹馬，于是這匹馬就隨唐僧一起西游天竺，馱回了真經(jīng)，回來(lái)后，這匹馬向惜日的好友――驢，講述了一路上的美麗風(fēng)景和奇文趣事，這頭驢好生羨慕。這匹馬說(shuō)：事實(shí)上，我和你都在一刻不停地走著一樣遠(yuǎn)的路，所不同是，我和師傅確定了遠(yuǎn)大的目標(biāo)，并堅(jiān)定地走下去，而你只是在磨坊里被矇住了眼睛。
請(qǐng)根據(jù)上面的文字提示，結(jié)合學(xué)校開(kāi)展的“My Dream”主題班會(huì)，寫(xiě)一篇書(shū)面發(fā)言材料，詞數(shù)80以上。

Answer 1

Hello, boys and girls!
So glad to share my dream with you today. When I was a child, I wanted to be a teacher. My father was a teacher, and he taught me a lot. I respected him very much. On my tenth birthday, he asked me,“What do you want to be when you grow up?”I answered proudly,“I want to be a teacher like you!”O(jiān)n hearing this, my father was very happy and said to me, “Work hard and your dream will come true. ” Not long ago, one of my primary school teachers was ill. She wanted me to take her place for two weeks. I was glad but nervous. My father said to me,“This is a good chance. Catch it! I wish you success!” When I came into the classroom, the children were very happy. I introduced myself to them. Soon, I got on well with them. They all liked me and I loved them. With my father and headmaster's help, I did the work very well. Now, I often miss those lovely children. That experience had made me even more interested in being a teacher in the future.
That’s all! Thanks for listening!

試題分析：這是一篇命題作文，要求寫(xiě)一篇介紹自己理想的短文。本題給出的材料較為簡(jiǎn)略，動(dòng)筆前應(yīng)先認(rèn)真閱讀材料，圍繞所給材料組織內(nèi)容，確定主要短語(yǔ)，句式等問(wèn)題。通過(guò)閱讀材料可知這篇短文主要使用的人稱(chēng)就是第一人稱(chēng)，時(shí)態(tài)問(wèn)題比較復(fù)雜，注意時(shí)態(tài)與時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)的搭配問(wèn)題。動(dòng)筆前可以按照材料內(nèi)容列出簡(jiǎn)單提綱，寫(xiě)出關(guān)鍵單詞。寫(xiě)作中注意語(yǔ)義通順，符合邏輯關(guān)系。上下文之間可以適當(dāng)使用連接詞。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：做英語(yǔ)書(shū)面表達(dá)時(shí)，要注意認(rèn)真審題，分析體裁，確定時(shí)態(tài)；分析內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，列出一些基本詞匯及詞組；注意表達(dá)的條理性，用好連接詞。最后，注意不要犯語(yǔ)法、句法以及搭配性錯(cuò)誤，寫(xiě)好后多讀多修改，我想一定會(huì)寫(xiě)出滿(mǎn)意的文章來(lái)。