Question

請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下面提示,以A  landslide（山崩）為題，寫一篇70詞左右的短文（開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)）。
1.上周一早上，在連續(xù)下了兩天大雨之后發(fā)生了山崩(landslide)。
2.我和媽媽在家，爸爸下午回來(lái)。雨很大。他叫我和媽媽趕快帶傘離開。
3就在那時(shí)，房子開始搖晃，我們非常害怕，迅速跑開了。
4.第二天上午回家時(shí)，我們發(fā)現(xiàn)房子沒(méi)有了，到處是碎玻璃和磚塊，我們感到很悲傷。
A  landslide
Last Monday morning, _________________________________________________________________________
                                                                                                 
                                                                                                 
                                                                                                 
                                                                                                 
                                                                                                 
                                                                                                 
                                                                                                 
                                                                                                 
                                                                                                 

Answer 1

One possible version：
A  Landslide
Last Monday morning, after two days’ heavy rain, a landslide happened. I was at home with my mother. Father came back in the afternoon. It was raining heavily/hard. He asked us to leave quickly with umbrellas. Just then, the house started to shake. We were very afraid and ran away quickly.
The following morning, we went back home. We found that there was no house at all. There were only pieces of glass and bricks everywhere. We felt very sad.

試題分析：
這是一篇給材料作文，介紹我和父母經(jīng)歷的山崩。結(jié)合所給材料，可知本文主要考查一般過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)，人稱為單數(shù)第一，三人稱，注意主謂一致問(wèn)題，句子結(jié)構(gòu)主要為系表結(jié)構(gòu)，注意一些常見句式的應(yīng)用，比如：I was……，It was……，及There were……等句式的應(yīng)用。寫作中注意運(yùn)用代詞，注意多種句式交替運(yùn)用。寫作中注意敘述順序，符合邏輯關(guān)系，注意文后要表達(dá)自己的悲傷。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)練。開頭介紹了下大雨發(fā)生了山崩，接下來(lái)介紹我和媽媽，爸爸快速離開，最后寫山崩后的景象。此處用了at home，were very afraid ， at all. 等這些詞組的運(yùn)用也讓文章增色不少。