Question

如今，超市給我們提供各種各樣的食物，人們隨時(shí)隨地都可以吃上美味的食物，
但是疾病也如影隨形，請(qǐng)你對(duì)你的老師和同學(xué)做個(gè)調(diào)查，告訴人們應(yīng)該吃什么，
怎樣吃才更健康。字?jǐn)?shù)在80 左右。
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Answer 1

Last week we do a survy about what we often eat every day. Some students say they often eat juck food because they are delicious. At the same time,some teachers say sometimes they are too busy,so they have to eat fast food.
In my opinion, We need healthy food rather than junk food or fast food. Hamburgers and french fries are the common examples of junk food. Although they taste delicious, they don't have enough nutrients. Bread, rice, fruit, or vegetables, are the common examples of the healthy food. They have a large amount of nutrients which provide you energy, and keep you away from diseases.
Anyway, we should eat a healthy diet. we should eat healthy food and have good eating habits, which mean we should eat the food on time and the food should be good for our health.

試題分析：這是一篇談?wù)擄嬍车脑掝}作文。要求介紹人們應(yīng)該吃什么，怎樣吃才更健康。采用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】這篇短文內(nèi)容清晰連貫并且使用了大量的的短語和連詞，如In my opinionAlthoughAnyway等
使文章的表達(dá)更豐富，更有邏輯性，更富有條理。