Question

請仔細審圖，假設(shè)這是Jane的房間，請你根據(jù)提示詞匯幫她描述一下房間內(nèi)物品的擺放情況。
要求：以第一人稱描述，不少于60詞。開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。
提示詞匯：bed, picture, wall(墻), bookcase, dresser, alarm clock, computer, CDs

This is my room. It’s very clean!
                                                                  
                                                                 
                                                                  
                                                                 
                                                                  
                                                                 
                                                                  
                                                                 
                                                                 
                                                                 

Answer 1

This is my room．It’s very clean! My jacket is on the bed. And my shoes are under the bed．My alarm clock is on the dresser. Those are my pictures. They are on the wall．Where are my books? Look! They are in my bookcase．And on the desk are my computer and some CDs.

試題分析：這是一篇圖片作文。本文要求按照題目要求結(jié)合圖片中的內(nèi)容完成這篇介紹房間擺設(shè)的作文。寫作中要包含房間內(nèi)物品的擺放位置、注意方位的描述等。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，人稱主要是第一人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意上下文的過度，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點說明】這篇短文簡明、扼要地介紹了房間的布局，并包含了文中所要求的基本信息。其中句式靈活、多變，介詞短語的準確使用為文章增色不少.如on the bed，under the bed，Those are my pictures.，Where are my books? Look!，最為值得稱道的是倒裝句式的運用很到位，如And on the desk are my computer and some CDs.學(xué)習(xí)中再注意總結(jié),牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時就可以適當(dāng)引用,使文章的表達更有邏輯性,更富有條理。