Question

“歲歲春草生，踏青二三月”。春天來了,萬物復(fù)蘇,正是郊游踏青的好時節(jié)。

假如你是光明中學(xué)八（7）班的Maria，請你用英語和我們分享一下你上次郊游的難忘經(jīng)歷吧！

要求：條理清楚, 語言表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，行文連貫，段落分明, 書寫整潔規(guī)范，80詞左右。

 

Answer 1

Last Sunday, our classmates and I went to the People’s Park to have a trip. The weather was very nice that day, and all of us were very excited. We started from our school on the early morning by bus. We took some water, fruits and snacks with us. In the park, we saw many beautiful flowers with different colors. There were many people there. Some of us went fishing, some had boating, and others flew kites. In the afternoon, we played some games together. We all had a good time there. I think it is a good time to relax ourselves.

【解析】

試題分析：這是篇命題作文。要寫一篇關(guān)于郊游的經(jīng)歷，是對已經(jīng)發(fā)生了的事情的描述，所以注意時態(tài)要用過去時。寫作時要注意文章的條理要清楚，表達(dá)要準(zhǔn)確流利，尤其注意主謂一致和時態(tài)的一致性。文中可適當(dāng)加入一些承接性的句子和短語來加強(qiáng)邏輯性。

【亮點說明】這篇作文條理清楚，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確流利。文章使用了一些很有用的表達(dá)方式，例如：our classmates and I went to the People’s Park to have a trip我和同學(xué)們?nèi)ト嗣窆珗@旅行；have a trip旅行。on the early morning在清晨；In the park, we saw many beautiful flowers with different colors.在公園，我們看到了不同顏色的美麗的花；with different colors不同顏色的。have a good time玩得開心。

考點：提綱作文。