Question

母愛情深，母愛無價。學(xué)會感恩，學(xué)會回報(bào)。某英語網(wǎng)站舉辦以“My mother”為主題的英語征文活動。請你根據(jù)下面表格提供的信息，寫一篇短文。

提示：1．短文應(yīng)包括表格中的全部信息，條理清楚，行文連貫，段落分明。

2．短文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)的人名和地名。

3．詞數(shù)90詞左右，開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

My mother

We need love. We also need to love. The person I love most is my mother.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

My Mother

We need love. We also need to love. The person I love most is my mother. My mother is 41 years old. She is a woman of medium build with long black hair. She is a history teacher in a middle school. She is good at cooking and be interested in playing volleyball. Her hobby is reading.

She did a lot for me when I was a child. She bought whatever I needed for my study, even though she didn’t have much money. She sent me from piano lessons to dancing lessons at the weekend. She cooked delicious and healthy food for me. I am deeply moved by what my mother has done for me.

When I grow up, I will do what I can to make my mother happy. I will find a good job after I graduate from college. I’ll save money and buy beautiful clothes that make her look still young. I’ll take her to wonderful sights around China. Most importantly, I will stay with her when I have free time. That’s what she wants most, I think.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們以My mother，我的母親為題寫一篇文章。這是一個記敘人物為話題的作文，是我們比較熟悉的一類。在題目中給出了我們具體的寫作提綱，我們可以按照題目的要求，從幾個方面來介紹自己的母親。一是關(guān)于母親的一些基本信息；第二是母親為自己做的事，以及自己的感受；第三是你將來要為母親做點(diǎn)什么來回報(bào)她。我們需要將這些信息補(bǔ)充完整，使內(nèi)容更加充實(shí)，并且用正確的英語表達(dá)出來。通過審題可知，這篇作文我們應(yīng)主要使用一般時態(tài)，其中記敘母親為自己所做的事情時，需要用一般過去時，因此這一部分要特別注意謂語動詞的形式；而表述自己將來為母親做什么事情的時候，需要用一般將來時。寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確使用各種時態(tài)，同時要注意全文意思是連貫和表達(dá)的流暢，多使用好的句型和短語。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】這是一篇優(yōu)秀的作文。這篇作文分成三個段落，第一段描寫了關(guān)于母親的一些基本信息，如年齡、外貌、興趣愛好等。這一段中作者主要使用了一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，這里比較好的句式有The person I love most is my mother、She is a woman of medium build with long black hair、She is good at cooking and be interested in playing volleyball。用到了定語從句，介詞with，短語be good at 和be interested in等；接下來作者描寫的是小時候母親為自己所做的事情，這一段主要使用了一般過去時態(tài)，這部分中主要有一些從句的使用，如She bought whatever I needed for my study, even though she didn’t have much money、I am deeply moved by what my mother has done for m等。這些長句的使用，使文章非常流暢，有節(jié)奏。最后作者寫了將來他要為母親做什么，這里使用了一般將來時。這部分中的好的句式有When I grow up, I will do what I can to make my mother happy、Most importantly, I will stay with her when I have free time. That’s what she wants most, I think等。

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