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10．學(xué)會(huì)自我保護(hù)是青少年需要具備的一種意識(shí)和能力．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合自己的觀點(diǎn)，以“How Can We Protect Ourselves？”為題，寫一篇不少于80詞的短文，談?wù)勗谏�活中青少年�?yīng)該怎樣自我保護(hù)（self-protection）．
提示：1．never swim alone；
2．be careful to make friends；
3．call the police when you are in danger；
4．eat healthy food；
5．don’t crowd（go upstairs and downstairs）
要求：1．句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，要點(diǎn)齊全，內(nèi)容合理，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫；
2．文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名、校名、地名．
How Can We Protect Ourselves
Self-protection is one of the most important skills for teenagers．But how can we protect ourselves？Here are some suggestions．
First，we should be careful when we make friends，especially on line．Second，if we are in danger，we must call the police for help in time so that we can keep ourselves safe．Also，we shouldeat healthily and safely．Besides，we shouldn’t crowd each other when we go upstairs or downstairs at school．Last，summer is coming，we must remember it’s dangerous to swim alone．
In short，everyone needs to learn how to protect ourselves and stay away from danger．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是以“How Can We Protect Ourselves？”為題．談?wù)勗谏�活中青少年�?yīng)該怎樣自我保護(hù)．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
1．不要獨(dú)自游泳；
2．慎重交友（尤其是網(wǎng)絡(luò)上）；
3．危險(xiǎn)時(shí)報(bào)警；
4．健康飲食；
5．不要擁擠（上下樓梯）
6．我的觀點(diǎn)
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語：
make friends交朋友
in danger危險(xiǎn)中
call sb for help打電話給某人求助
in time 及時(shí)
stay away from 遠(yuǎn)離
【高分句型】
1．Second，①if we ②are in danger，we must ③call the police for help④in time⑤so that we can ⑥keep ourselves safe．
①if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句．主句含有情態(tài)動(dòng)詞must，從句用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．
②be in danger處于危險(xiǎn)中
③call sb for help打電話給某人求助．
④in time 及時(shí)
⑤keep sb+adj保持某人怎樣
2．Last，summer is coming，we must remember①②it’s dangerous to swim alone．
①remember后是省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語從句
②it是形式主語，動(dòng)詞不定式是真正主語．
3．①In short，everyone needs to learn ②how to protect ourselves and ③stay away from danger．
①插入語，簡言之．
②疑問詞+to do sth作為learn的賓語．
③stay away from 遠(yuǎn)離…

解答 How Can We Protect Ourselves
Self-protection is one of the most important skills for teenagers．But how can we protect ourselves？Here are some suggestions．
First，we should be careful when we make friends，especially on line．（慎重交友）Second，if we are in danger，we must call the police for help in time so that we can keep ourselves safe．（危險(xiǎn)時(shí)報(bào)警）【高分句型】
Also，we should eat healthily and safely．（健康飲食）Besides，we shouldn’t crowd each other when we go upstairs or downstairs at school．（不要擁擠，上下樓梯）Last，summer is coming，we must remember it’s dangerous to swim alone．【高分句型】（不要獨(dú)自游泳）
In short，everyone needs to learn how to protect ourselves and stay away from danger．（我的觀點(diǎn)）【高分句型】

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文是一篇提綱作文，內(nèi)容貼近生活，學(xué)會(huì)自我保護(hù)是青少年需要具備的一種意識(shí)和能力，寫一篇關(guān)于自我保護(hù)的作文，學(xué)生有話可說．在寫作時(shí)要表達(dá)清楚，信息完整，語言通順，語意連貫．充分利用好提示語言，使作文結(jié)構(gòu)完整．同時(shí)要注意情態(tài)動(dòng)詞的運(yùn)用讓文章更飽滿．