Question

假如你是李華，就個人愛好帶來的困惑給英國朋友Stephen發(fā)電子郵件進行交流并請求幫助。

要點：

李華	愛好	對太空旅行感興趣；經(jīng)常到圖書館閱讀資料
困惑	得不到老師理解
觀點	1.個人愛好有助于學習； 2. ……(至少一點)
老師	觀點	時間應花在功課上；成績就是一切

要 求：1）表達清楚，語法正確，上下文連貫；

2）必須包括表格中所有的相關信息，并適當發(fā)揮；

3）詞數(shù)：100詞左右（征文的開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)）；

4）不得使用真實姓名、校名和地名等。

Dear Stephen,

I am writing to tell you about my problem with my teacher. I don’t know how to deal with it and would like your help.

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What shall I do? Can you offer me some suggestions? I am looking forward to your early reply.

Best wishes

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Stephen

I am writing to tell you about my problem with my teacher. I don’t know how to deal with it and would like your help.

You know I am crazy about space travel. In my spare time I often go to the library to find something to read. This makes my teacher very angry. To him, good marks are everything and I should spend more time on my lessons, even at weekends.

I think healthy hobbies are helpful for our studies. If I can achieve a balance between my schoolwork and my hobby, it will be of great value to my future development. But I don’t think my teacher understands me . I feel bad about that .

What shall I do ? Can you offer me some suggestions? I am looking forward to your early reply.

Besth wishes

LiHua

【解析】

試題分析：考查提綱類書面表達：這是一篇提綱類作文，我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點表達出來. 動筆前，一定要認真分析要點，理解要點要表達的含義，不能遺漏要點，跑題偏題。本作文中給出的要點比較具體,故需要準確表達.寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。特別注意在選擇句式時要賦予變化。平時除了加強詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果。

【亮點說明】范文出現(xiàn)一些常見的短語am crazy about對。。感到瘋狂； spend more time on 在。。花費時間；are helpful for對。。有益； offer me some suggestions提供某人建議； looking forward to盼望著；This makes my teacher very angry.這讓我的老師很生氣，angry做賓語補足語。If I can achieve a balance between my schoolwork and my hobby, it will be of great value to my future development.如果我能平衡功課與作業(yè)，它將對我的將來發(fā)展很有好處， be of 不可數(shù)名詞等于be +adj .

考點： 提綱類作文