Question

資源短缺威脅全球，節(jié)約資源刻不容緩。勤儉光榮，浪費(fèi)可恥。假設(shè)你是李雷，請(qǐng)你給全班同學(xué)寫(xiě)一封倡議信，內(nèi)容包括：
談?wù)勀阍��?jīng)看到的校園內(nèi)出現(xiàn)的資源浪費(fèi)的現(xiàn)象，你當(dāng)時(shí)的感受是什么？
針對(duì)校園出現(xiàn)的各種浪費(fèi)現(xiàn)象，向同學(xué)們提出至少三條改進(jìn)措施
號(hào)召大家節(jié)約資源，杜絕浪費(fèi)。
注意：在書(shū)信中不能透露真實(shí)的姓名和學(xué)校，不能照抄原文。詞數(shù)：80詞左右。
參考詞匯：resource(資源)  electricity(電) 
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Li Lei

Answer 1

Dear classmates,
Nowadays, some of our students have formed some bad habits on campus. They leave the lights on in the daytime or leave water running after washing. Some leave too much food on the table after eating in the canteen. Besides,waste paper and books can be seen everywhere. These bad habits will not only have bad influence on our character and behavior,but also waste the limited resources. If we keep on wasting things, there will not be anything left on the earth. So it is high time that we had to deal with the problems.Firstly, make sure that the lights and the electric fans are turned off when there is no one in the room.Secondly,don’t forget to turn off the tap after it is used. Thirdly, it will be good enough for us to use a basket instead of a plastic bag when go to the market. Fourthly, We can use both sides of every piece of paper, especially when we are making notes.
If we reduce the waste, we will change the present situation.
Yours,
Li Lei

試題分析：這是一篇話(huà)題作文。作本文題材緊扣學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)生活，學(xué)生有很大的發(fā)揮空間。動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真審題，深入挖掘話(huà)題內(nèi)涵，不可遺漏要點(diǎn)，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。行文時(shí)要注意人稱(chēng)、時(shí)態(tài)的搭配及主謂一致問(wèn)題，同時(shí)適當(dāng)使用連接詞，注意上下文聯(lián)系緊密，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這篇短文涵蓋了題目要求的所有要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容，表達(dá)準(zhǔn)確，意思連貫，符合邏輯。在文章的結(jié)構(gòu)組織上很好地使用了簡(jiǎn)單句和復(fù)合句，使文章自然流暢。同時(shí)，使用了一些常用的句式和短語(yǔ)，如：not only---but also、it is high time that從句、make sure that 從句、it will be good enough for us to use、in the daytime、have influence on、deal with、turn off、instead of以及連接詞besides、firstly、secondly等，這為文章增色不少。在學(xué)習(xí)中注意積累，牢記一些常用句式及短語(yǔ)，寫(xiě)作時(shí)就可以適當(dāng)引用，使文章的表達(dá)更有邏輯性，更富有條理。